Tuesday, June 1, 2010

Summer, Just Around the Corner! Or Around the Block?

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author's note: This is a short story about summer, how sometimes it can seem like forever for that one final bell to ring.
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"Tick tock, tick tock" The pressure is building up, time is almost up. The red arrow on the clock is moving slower than ever. Every tick feels like a minute. Feet are bouncing up and down, and hearts are pounding in and out. Watching the red arrow, just about to hit twelve. Fifteen seconds left, ten seconds left, five seconds left, four, three, two, one... the clock froze. All the ears, waiting for that final bell, drop down in sadness. Everybody is shocked. No bell, no summer. The clock is making a strange noise, "click". Staring back at the clock, another minute till summer. Wait, how can this be? It was just a second away from summer! How can there still be a minute? The red arrow starts all over again. Thirty seconds left, fifteen seconds left, ten seconds left, five seconds left, four, three, two, one, again the red arrow stops. Glancing away from the clock and looking back at it again, another minute to go! Feet are bouncing up and down, hearts are pounding in and out, five seconds left, four, three, two, one, the red arrow stops again. How can this be? Before, there was a minute and then another minute, but why won't the bell ring!? Summer, was thought to be right around the corner. Instead, it is a few blocks down. Looking at the clock again, one minute left to go. Thirty seconds left, fifteen seconds left, ten seconds left, five seconds left, four, three, two, one, at long last, the bell finally rang. Everybody jumps for excitement. Running outside, sniffing the air, summer is finally here.

4 comments:

  1. Angela, this was a really cool piece. I especially liked the analogy you made between around the corner and down the block. It sounded a little bit repetitive, but I think that was the sound you wanted, like the same thing kept happening, so great job!

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  2. Whoa!! This is really good, Angela! I like the repetitive patterns you used because it made summer was there, but not quite. Also, I can't wait until the three sentences are finally true :D Awesome work.

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  3. This is a really fun post -- fun to read, and I'll bet, fun to write. When you use your sincere voice, it makes the best of your writing.

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  4. Angela, I really liked the way you made the anxiety feel so strong in this poem! It was a pleasure to read :) Great job!

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